Your Lust Is Chronic

I will never forget
the first time you touched me.
Your tongue sizzled on my impressionable skin.

Riving, screaming and bucking I begged you.
“Stop!”
You did.

My mind’s fingers learned
to stay away from open flames.

So you waited for someone else to throw me
on my back, to crush shoulder and breast
until my virgin bone cracked.

Riving and screaming I begged you.
“Stop!”
You didn’t.

I’velearned to carry your mark on my skin and shoulder.
But it wasn’t enough—you took a leg, a foot, a lot of comforts and some sleep;
your lust is chronic…

“Riving for you? Not really.”
You aren’t worth that kind of effort.
I rather write you off.


“Escape” by Yvonne Palermo
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23 comments:

  1. Wonderful picture and the words are a perfect fit. Erotic and wrong in a good way. You're going to need a book of poems if you keep up this kind of quality. Really, you're just making work for yourself. =P

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    1. I blame it all on the toads. They hop and verse so prettily. And I wanted to join in... ;-)

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  2. Snap, that last stanza is a doozy!!!! Your use of the refrain excellent and varied just enough to add tons of flavor and put the tone in context. Just don't write us off!!! wonderful writing....thanks for coming out, I appreciate it!

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    1. You gifted us with a delightful prompt. And your poem? I shall read it aloud to a few souls... ;-D

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  3. Beautiful Magaly, Though this piece sounds quite sultry; what I read into it is you chronic pain. I hope a day comes when things like chronic pain and other ailments like my diabetes is no longer an issue for any of us.

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  4. "Riving" is an incredibly harsh word, I learn here tho I never noticed it's power before, nor how close a sound it is to write. This poem stunned me silent and still. Stop! should happen instantly, should never need repeating, yet here it is again and again riving my heart.

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  5. Magaly this poem is a perfect write off on brutallity against women... Rape child marriage forced widow hood so many ills prevail in current society that makes it impossible to empower woman completely in a male dominated society.... Well penned...

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  6. Potent and skillful poem--an inexorable progression of force and resistance, and yet the core of the speaker remains strong and defiant, bending but whole, able to to turn away from destruction without offering it (quite a rare grace)...I especially love the title, and the refrain--they work together perfectly. Excellent stuff.

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    1. "bending but whole." I like that. It implies pressure, even pain, but life keeps on going.

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  7. This poem lies somewhere between song and outcry, and the voice speaks for many young women. Like, Corey, I like the subtle changes in your refrain - that added much weight to your subject matter.

    PS. I sent an email to the address given under your 'about Me' tab. I'm not sure if you have received it.

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    1. I'm enjoying the words everyone is choosing to describe this poem; "between song and outcry" resonates with me... lyrics that are sung with a voice full of tears.

      After reading this comment, I rescued your email from my junk folder. Will reply soon. Thanks for letting me know.

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  8. I know what this feels like, from both positive and negative ends. This could speak for those of us who have been abused, but it can also speak of the kind of absorption into a *good* relationship that so few of us ever find, all in one dark, screaming metaphor. Well put, Magaly.

    -your Artful White Fox.

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    1. My beloved Artful White Fox, I love the fact that you can find something positive in just about anything. I believe that if someone points at a crack in the box of ugliness, eventually others who were also looking for a way out will be able to make the crack into a door and fly... Sometimes screaming, buy hey, no one said it was going to be easy, right? ♥

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  9. The flames are burning! Wow! Excellent Magaly ;o)

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    1. Yes, they are. Let's all use the energies of this fire and morph them into something useful, right?

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  10. riving is not giving, nor is it breaking. the narrator here does not break. powerful ~

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