....I was definitely curious to see what happened. Will have to let the imagination do the rest of the work.
I hope Emma and Regina catch a train that's heading to a better life!
I hope so, too.
You do know you have to write this in full now, don't you? XXX
It seems that way, lol!
Touching story. Calls for a sequel :)
I can't resists the "what happened next" bits. ;-)
Ouch! that pulled a heart thread! xoDebi
Hold on to it!
I agree w/Gina!... U definitely say a lot in 5 sentences! :-)
More can be said in a few brief words than in an entire novel sometimes! Love it.
I love the 5-sentence restriction. It makes me work hard for every word... It feels like poetry.
Cash and crotches, pretty much sums up the relationship with her mom. Sad story with a fillip of hope at the end. You are such a master...uh, mistress of words! Keep 'em coming!
Yay! I'm adding Mistress of Words to my resume. ;-D
here's to a much better future than past for Emma.
*raising my glass*
Cash and crotches. Love it.
I like the starkness of the tale, and the alliteration of "cash and crotches".
Words do such wonderful things when we pair them nicely together, don't they? ;-)
I wonder what Regina's five sentences are.
I like that thought. So much so that I suspect we'll read them next week.
Would love to know more, Magaly! :)
I suspect your wish will come true, Aayesha. ;-)What a lovely name, by the way.
Looking forward to reading Regina's thoughts.
I'm looking forward to reading it, too! ;-)
This is really powerful. I love it.
So glad you do. ;-)
This feels unfinished. No, no, that's good. Great! Short fiction should feel undone, like a few pages are missing, like maybe there's more hidden in the words that we just missed. Like the author played a mean game and is withholding story. This has a lot of weight for a short bit of fiction, and feels like a journey that just started. I hope you're writing more. I think you have the seed of something. People like journeys and this one is about escaping. Excellent words, Lady Magaly.
Unfinished speaks of more to come. I'll take it. ;-)
I'm really sorry if this is a double post but Blogger is being a cow and ate my comment. :( Well done on tying this nicely to the indomitable Jane Eyre! I love how you work with the tight format and produce a whole backstory of actual and emotional poverty through a few phrases, and allow us to see forward to another tale, born in hope with head held high.
Blogger needs a therapist.I do love these bits of fiction. These wee windows that can be opened into an entire world... or just closed.
I like the open ending, it leaves you wanting to know more. It starts the story as one chapter of life is actually ending but another, hopefully better is beckoning.
I do hope things go better for the girls.
Here's to a better future for them ;o) I hope you write more to this story ;o)Big Hugs ;o)
I think I will. I'm kind of curious about Regina.
I'd love to know what comes Emma's way next. I bet she remains equally fearless, no matter what!