Just Shoot

I’ve expanded this piece, and retitled it, “Gardens and Thorn.” Go on, my Wicked Luvs, read the extended tale and let me know what you think.    

27 comments:

  1. Wow! Excellent story and intense! I'm lovin this...I want more! lol

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  2. I love the way you can immediately pull me into the scene with the characters, M. It's such a rare gift.
    Thank you for sharing. I want more too!

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  3. Really captures the intensity, anxiety and pressure of the situation. Great flash, Magaly. =)

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  4. What happens next???????

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  5. Intense. Great discription.

    This? --> "constipate the crap out of me.” Hilarious. To me. I have a 6th grade sense of humor.

    I didn't enjoy reading this because it reminded me too much of training, but it was very well captured ;-)

    And a camouflaged hat? Really, Marine?

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  6. MidnightSage - You might get your wish. Soon.

    Kallan - Glad you found it engaging.

    John - Thanks.

    Penny - Soon...

    Colleen - I know exactly what you mean, and I emailed you about the hat lol

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  7. great story telling! you got me anxiously waiting to see what happens next.
    ps- Colleen is not the only one who has a 6th grade humour, lol!

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  8. Wow, Magaly! Every nerve ending is still leaving a tingling feeling all over my skin.

    I "feel" it too. What "it" is, I can't be sure yet, but it's there...coming.

    What an amazing glimpse you've given!

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  9. Magaly, this is very intense! You got me pulled in right away! Wow!! I can't wait for more! I think there is alot more to this story!
    I'm with Colleen and PinkGlitterFae! 6th grade humour! LOL!

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  10. Wow! I lived reading that! Great writing, I too want more! Thank you so much for sharing. Many blessings!

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  11. I gave you an award over at Cheap Wine and Cookies: http://cheapwineandcookies.blogspot.com/2011/05/versatile-gritty-and-unpretentious-ill.html

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  12. I am nearly speechless! Magaly, that is incredible. Wonderful cliff hanger. I must know what happens next and you need to be published!

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  13. I love this! I want more of this!

    <3

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  14. PinkGlitterFae - Great to know ;-) because I'm working on the rest of the piece. And I'm sooo glad you guys my 6th grade humor because I enjoy writing it and laughing at it.

    Green Witch - It's a bit surreal, isn't it?

    Magic Love Crow - Hooray! I shall give you more ;-)

    Colleen - On my way to claim it and I shall display it, proudly, soon.

    Mina - Your are too sweet!

    LJ - Ask and you shall receive. Soon...

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  15. This is amazing, my dear! You pulled me in right from the get go into a genre I'm typically not interested in (military, war and survival type stories are more my love's cuppa tea) which is a phenomenal credit to your ability to create. Even more so, because I want to know what happens next! :-)

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  16. You enticed me right into your world! Loved this story and I hope they make it out okay??!!
    Hugs
    SueAnn

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  17. Danni - You made me grin like a loon ;-D

    SueAnn - We'll have to see what happens...

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  18. Crappola in a basket, Magaly this is a great read, wooo but painful if based on true story...
    Totally visual, I felt as I was watching from behind another log, or maybe up a tree, thank God no one saw me, but I was a friendly ;)

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  19. Shelle - You just made me laugh sooo loud.

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  20. Scarey ... they might even shoot friendlies...

    Keep me in mind when you need to put pics in your books...

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  21. Judy - Judy that is the nicest request I've received in a long time! Gracias ;-)

    And on the sad part, yes, bullets tend to be blind. Scary.

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  22. My heart breaks at war stories, it's hard to imagine what soldiers must go through and the tough decisions they have to make.

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  23. My heart breaks at war stories, it's hard to imagine what soldiers must go through and the tough decisions they have to make.

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  24. Shelle - You just made me laugh sooo loud.

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  25. PinkGlitterFae - Great to know ;-) because I'm working on the rest of the piece. And I'm sooo glad you guys my 6th grade humor because I enjoy writing it and laughing at it.

    Green Witch - It's a bit surreal, isn't it?

    Magic Love Crow - Hooray! I shall give you more ;-)

    Colleen - On my way to claim it and I shall display it, proudly, soon.

    Mina - Your are too sweet!

    LJ - Ask and you shall receive. Soon...

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  26. I am nearly speechless! Magaly, that is incredible. Wonderful cliff hanger. I must know what happens next and you need to be published!

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